Show vs Tell Exercises

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Hi all! I am doing today's post for the month-long writing series here at hd_writers, and I thought I'd talk about the concept of Show vs Tell.

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Exercises


EXERCISE 1: Can anyone comment saying how the second version of the scene exemplifies SHOWING?

EXERCISE 2: Choose one of these scenes to re-write and add elements of SHOWING, and post in the comments.

Scene 1:
On his way to breakfast, Draco saw Harry hug Ginny outside the Great Hall and felt insanely jealous and angry. So he tripped Harry on his way in, feeling a rush of happiness when Harry's attention was suddenly all focused on him instead.

Scene 2:
Hermione suspects Harry of liking Draco, because there are signs... loads of signs. But whenever she brings it up to him, he gets defensive and denies it. Hermione is not happy about the crush he suspects he has, but she would rather Harry just admitted it than hid it all the time.

Scene 3:
When he kissed Draco for the first time, Harry felt incredibly aroused.
BONUS: This scene could become extra layered and complicated if, mingled with Harry's arousal, was also shame and doubt.